I tried to rewrite your article for you: http://pastebin.com/UYfu1EyX http://pastebin.com/UYfu1EyX I could have taken more liberties, but decided to just stick

I tried to rewrite your article for you: http://pastebin.com/UYfu1EyX http://pastebin.com/UYfu1EyX I could have taken more liberties, but decided to just stick with a quick edit. I completely agree with your message. Keep at it!