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It looks like a great first draft of a short story. Keep up the writing. I mean this in no way to be insulting of the quality of writing, I think the flow is

by mrtron 17y ago

It looks like a great first draft of a short story. Keep up the writing. I mean this in no way to be insulting of the quality of writing, I think the flow is just a bit rough.

nonrecursive 17y ago
Thanks! I've had the same feedback from other folks as well, and I agree.