It's nice that you related some of your experience to others. The "conclusion" seems outrageously obvious though and I'm not quite sure why you focused on it.

It's nice that you related some of your experience to others. The "conclusion" seems outrageously obvious though and I'm not quite sure why you focused on it. In almost any competitive application process it benefits you to apply earlier if your goal is to receive a more thorough review. Perhaps you can talk a bit more about other factors or advice on what you felt you should have done better.